Abandoned and forgotten

Awareness, Humor, inspiration, Motivational, Poetry, prompts

Punam’s prompt guidelines

  • Write a Pantoum on the theme of abandonment.

What is an pantoum?

  • The pantoum consists of a series of quatrains rhyming ABAB in which the second and fourth lines of a quatrain recur as the first and third lines in the succeeding quatrain;
    • Each quatrain introduces a new second rhyme as BCBC, CDCD;
    • The first line of the series recurs as the last line of the closing quatrain, and the third line of the poem recurs as the second line of the closing quatrain, rhyming ZAZA;
  • The design is simple:
    • Line 1
      Line 2
      Line 3
      Line 4
      Line 5 (repeat of line 2)
      Line 6
      Line 7 (repeat of line 4)
      Line 8
    • Continue with as many stanzas as you wish, but the ending stanza then repeats the second and fourth lines of the previous stanza (as its first and third lines), and also repeats the third line of the first stanza, as its second line, and the first line of the first stanza as its fourth. So the first line of the poem is also the last.
    • Last stanza:
      • Line 2 of previous stanza
        Line 3 of first stanza
        Line 4 of previous stanza
        Line 1 of first stanza

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It was left abandoned and gathering dust

Having adorned my wrist for so many years

The watch I wore with pride is now collecting rust

Without its reassuring presence I had so many fears

~*~

Having adorned my wrist for so many years

I was able to be on time, was given punctual as a label

Without its reassuring presence, I had so many fears

Of missed appointments and messed up time table

~*~

Now a fitness tracker my left wrist bears

I had the audacity of replacing my watch

To feel elation when I complete my target as it cheers

I moved ahead with my goals, bringing my fitness up a notch

~*~

I had the audacity of replacing my watch

The watch I wore with pride is now collecting rust

I moved ahead with my goals, bringing my fitness up a notch

It was left abandoned and gathering dust

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This is the first time I’ve written a complicated poem like this pantoum! So if I haven’t followed the rules I beg forgiveness 😅

In response to W3 # prompted by Punam this week and hosted by David

#Keepitalive

#W3

Published by Sadje

I am writing to express my opinion, share my experiences and to maybe provide some insight. My blog is addressing women at 50 ( but men are welcome to read my posts) ,their issues and the questions that come up at this stage in life. I don’t aim to teach, but to learn together.

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55 thoughts on “Abandoned and forgotten”

  1. Excellent poetry, Sadje. I like the chorus styled lyrical quality of your pantoum! Well done, my friend!
    And when is a watch, not just a watch? Answer: When it’s a fitness tracker, counting Up goals; rather than counting Down minutes.

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  8. I loved your poem Sadje. It’s certainly tinged with the sadness of the abandonment of your formerly treasured watch. I must admit I’m tempted to abandon my smartwatch and go back to my old favourites

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  13. I support your choice, Sadje ~ health first!

    Also, given your reservations about attempting a pantoum, I must say, quite earnestly, that you rocked this form ~ you should give yourself more credit, my friend!

    Much love,
    David

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    1. Thank you so much for encouraging me and helping me write this. It was outside my comfort zone but now I’ve broken the barrier, perhaps I’ll write it again too. 💖💖💖

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